Baby Poem

by Mrs Elizabeth Darcy

  • Poetry
  • Lyrical

Published March 2, 2011

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I wrote a baby poem

For no one’s good but mine

The metre neatly even

I tried to make it rhyme.

I wrote a baby poem,

And this I have to say:

That if it brings one smile,

It’s done its good today.

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Kayde2
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Kayde2 commented Comment · Mar 2, 2011

I found this to be very clever. After reading the title I thought it was going to be a poem about babies, but it wasn't. I liked the parallel! Well written, keep it up.
-Kayde

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BehindtheMask
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BehindtheMask commented Comment · Mar 2, 2011

This is sweet. And I like the use of "I wrote a baby poem", because it's very childlike, which gives an even more innocent tone to the piece. Well done!

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IcyFlame wrote a review Review · Mar 2, 2011

Mrs Elizabeth Darcy wrote:I wrote a baby poem A strange way of putting it, it's almost childlike... Don't know if this is what you were going for?

For no one’s good but mine No one what? No poem?

The feet are neatly even Feet?

I tried to make it rhyme. You did, well done :)

I wrote a baby poem, Good repetition, and it really is a small, sweet poem

And this I have to say: I like the word order here

That if it brings one smile,Cute (:

It’s done its good today. Aww, well it made me smile


I liked the poem, as you can see because it was small I tried to comment on each line! Hope this was valuable, and if not I hope it showed that I liked it! Keep posting



When she transformed into a butterfly, the caterpillars spoke not of her beauty, but of her weirdness. They wanted her to change back into what she always had been. But she had wings.
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